Under Threat At Gallipoli

Under Threat At Gallipoli

It’s 4:44 am on the 25th of April 1915. Me and my friend Ali are both on the landing boat. We were

sent here to help Russia.  They desperately needed more weapons to fight off the Germans and we were going to help them. We are under the cover of darkness. The moon had dipped behind the clouds. I’m shaking nervously all over. I feel there is a bucket of poison in my stomach. I don’t know what’s coming next.

All of a sudden the steam boat in front of us let off a massive spark of light giving away our position. Then I realised we were  under threat at Gallipoli. Gun shot’s flew everywhere. I picked up my gun like it was my only hope. It doesn't work  Ali tried to fix it. He says “Try the trigger!” I fire “BOOM!” His lifeless body falls to the floor with great force.  He is crying for mercy. I don’t want to look at what had just happened. I realised that this is it!  This is the end.

By Noah

I am learning to write an interesting recount.

I am so proud of making my recount interesting by using similes and adjectives.

It can be tricky to write in past tense.

My buddy can help me by checking my work.

The next step for me in my learning is to find an interesting topic for me to write about.